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There's no nighttime here,
not really,
                no scrap of honest darkness.
Just the garish lights and forsaken spaces 
                                                            vacant of cars and people 
                                                                                                and all their daytime amenities.
How is a man to find his way through all this light?

It isn't right, this open kind of darkness,
but some things cannot be unwound,
                      cannot be un-forseen,
                      cannot be undone,
                      cannot be forsaken by that which is not there
by the people who no longer are in the space
                                                                   afraid of the dark.

It is useless to scream interjections
to shout into the void
that which you think you feel
                            but are not sure that you feel 
                                                    but something in the feeling of it is right:
this indignation, this wrong-ness.

There is something to it you cannot place
                                                                but are sure of 
only in its ephemerality is it solid
only by knowing you cannot feel it can it be felt.

How have we come to this?
Pick up a stone and shatter a light.
Find that darkness which cannot be broken
but is...
       ...is broken by...

US

And now is the realization,
                                    winding back,
that I am culpable,
                            guilty,
                                        un-innocent.
Set down the stone, children,
                                        set it down and walk away.
Remember the darkness from which you came
                                 to which you can never return
not because of any conquerable impossibility,
but because it is no longer there.

There cannot be more than this,
         cannot be more than us,
but that belief makes itself untrue.
                                                    There is power in denial.
There is a special providence
                                        to that which we deny
                                        to that which we preemptively unmake.
It is power beyond admission, 
and it will rule us.

My wanderings come to an end.
I fall into bed
                    towards sleep
                    towards that darkness to which
                                                                I cannot return
towards everything of my own making.
Truly, my own.
That which is a part of me,
                                     but will be forgotten come morning.

Good night, children, good night.
With great respect and/or deep apologies to Charles Olson.
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Through all this Light by AllytotheQuaking "speaks with authority, yet the subject and setting are ambiguous enough to engage the reader" (suggester's words). ( Suggested by BlackBowfin and Featured by neurotype )
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Thank you!
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Congrats on the Daily Deviation! Heart 
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Thank you kindly!
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You're welcome :)
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Congratulations on the DD! :love: 

Have a nice day :iconlainloveplz:
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Thank you muchly! I'm pumped.
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Welcome! :love:
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An absolutely wonderful piece! Congratulations on the DD! 
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AllytotheQuaking Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014   Writer
I'm glad you liked it. Thank you so much!
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You're very welcome! :D
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I'm not sure what to think of this. I like to think that it's about light pollution, how there should be less light and darkness is good. But I can't quite decide.
What I do know, is that I want to write something about light pollution now. XD
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AllytotheQuaking Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014   Writer
There is a part in here about light pollution. That is one thing that it is about.
Let me know if/when you do; I'd love to see yours.
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Ehh, I doubt I actually will, or if I do it won't be soon. I'm more of a visual artist than writer. But if I ever do I'll be sure to link it to you! c:
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Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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AllytotheQuaking Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014   Writer
Thank you! I am very pleased, myself.
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This is truly good writing.  Congrats on your DLR.  

I like the dark realization that the veil has been lifted.  What is seen is truth made more frightening by the lie we believed before and cannot go back to.   We are both guilty and innocent of perpetuating the lie as well as revealing the truth and the harm that both have caused.

I identified with these these lines In particular;

There is something to it you cannot place

                                                                but are sure of 
only in its ephemerality is it solid
only by knowing you cannot feel it can it be felt.

They brought to mind an anxious feeling of being on the brink of understanding, not quite able to grasp.  
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Thank you; glad you liked it.
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:)
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLR (Daily Literature Recognition) in a news article that can be found here. Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, I'm not altogether sure where to start here.  I still find this poem completely unnerving- it has a conscience, but it has a job to do.  I see the setting as a long term siege- likely a wartime setting, but could certainly apply to any tense social atmosphere.  You clear everything out, want to see the threat coming- no surprises, so the light could also represent personal over-vigilance.

I think that his section is one of the most unpredictably powerful few lines I've read in a while:

Remember the darkness from which you came
                                 to which you can never return
not because of any conquerable impossibility,
but because it is no longer there.


It's so damn absolute, I don't even know why.  It just struck me, that there is a permanence to the situation that can't be undone- that it's gone far enough and bad enough- that this struggle will outlive us all- that both sides ensured it.

There is a special providence
                                        to that which we deny
                                        to that which we preemptively unmake.
It is power beyond admission, 
and it will rule us.


I love the concept- the power to destroy and control actually controlling the user.  It ties in very well with the first passage quoted in my comment, with things having gone too far to go back.  It's a very high concept that isn't easy or comfortable to convey.

I like that there is an inner-struggle within the writer, they have a conscience, but the situation only allows one so much introspection and compassion.

This one really took me by surprise.

I'd like to know a little more about the setting sometime when you have a chance.
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AllytotheQuaking Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014   Writer
This is what I really love about good feedback: readers see things that the writer wouldn't. Interpretation spirals out of presentation, and suddenly the poem means so much more.

As for setting, well, I wrote this after a walk at night through the city. The streetlights really started to get to me; that's where the first line comes from. Everything else just kind of went from there. I've spent quite a bit of time in the MN northwoods and ND/SD prairies, where nighttime is actually dark.

I leaned heavily on Charles Olson's work here; his style, the pacing. If you want to know what I mean, look up him reading any of the Maximus Letters (or anything, really) on YouTube. That's the kind of sound I'm going for. 

I don't know what more I can really say; I'm still stumbling through the piece myself. I really do appreciate the feedback, and I might as well go on record as saying that I don't think divergent interpretations weaken the poem at all; in fact, they strengthen it. The more interpretations that can be gotten out of a work, the better it has been done. The only "incorrect" interpretation is one that cannot be supported by the content of the piece. </vent>
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